Icy Girl

Everybody is calling her Icy Girl.JJ got spotted ice skating with some new guy, and by Monday the nickname was everywhere. Elijah has been carrying that girl around in his head for months. Now he has to watch the whole school decide who she is.He has always been that kid. The one adults nod at and say is going places. Lately even the golden boy is struggling to hold it together. Losing his stepfather hit different than he expected, and his friend group? Complicated does not cover it.Then his mentor's daughters show up. Lael has that effortless cool that lets her slide between worlds like it costs her nothing, switching up her entire vibe depending on who is in the room. Bella is younger and somehow sees straight through everything Elijah pretends does not bother him. Their Valley life is everything his isn't, and he cannot look away from either of them.Neither can JJ.When your friendships are shifting, your loyalty is getting tested, and everybody has an opinion about who you should be, how do you figure out who you actually are?Sometimes you have to define yourself before the world does it for you.What makes this the stronger one: it opens on the title instead of walking up to it, and "Everybody is calling her Icy Girl" is a complete hook in six words - that survives any truncation Amazon throws at it. The Lael and Bella paragraph now has a job, since it's the pressure on the JJ thread rather than separate setup. And "Neither can JJ" is a two-word paragraph that lands as a turn, which is a move your printed copy doesn't have.One flag: "Neither can JJ" is mine, not from your book. It implies JJ is watching Elijah with the sisters and reacting. If that's not what happens, cut the line - everything else stands without it.